So, I submitted my final draft and here is the grading rubric. What…

Question Answered step-by-step So, I submitted my final draft and here is the grading rubric. What…                                                                                So, I submitted my final draft and here is the grading rubric. What can I do to make a better grade? When I submitted my introductory paragraph, I got a 100% but the rest of it needs work.  She also commented that I needed to explain how my quotes supports my thesis when I use one, this is to be done as soon as the quote is stated in the paper.CriteriaMastery Achieved Approaching Mastery Needs Improvement Criterion Score Content15 points11-15You have written with excellence an argument essay on the prompt of your choice including a rebuttal and conclusion using your sources. 10 points6-10You have written an argument essay on the prompt of your choice including a rebuttal and conclusion using your sources.  5 points0-5You have not written an argument essay on the prompt of your choice including a rebuttal and conclusion using your sources. Score of Content,10 / 15Conclusion15 points11-15You have written with excellence a conclusion paragraph following the tips for writing effective conclusion paragraphs in the lesson. 10 points6-10You have written a conclusion paragraph following the tips for writing effective conclusion paragraphs in the lesson.  5 points0-5You have not written a conclusion paragraph following the tips for writing effective conclusion paragraphs in the lesson. Score of Conclusion,10 / 15Complete Essay10 points9-10You have written with excellence a complete essay of at least 4 paragraphs including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.  8 points5-8You have written a complete essay of at least 4 paragraphs including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. 4 points0-4You have not written a complete essay of at least 4 paragraphs including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Score of Complete Essay,10 / 10Spelling/Grammar10 points9-10You have written complete sentences with no noticeable errors in spelling and/or grammar.  8 points5-8You have written complete sentences with few noticeable errors in spelling and/or grammar. 4 points0-4You have written complete sentences with numerous errors in spelling and/or grammar. Score of Spelling/Grammar,10 / 10                                                                        Unplug on Drives and Save Lives   Some people believe that texting and driving can sometimes be harmless because of the small amount of time it takes to send a text; however, it can also cause someone their life. Johnstone says in “Texting and Driving” that a driver travelling at 55 mph covers the length of a football field (in highway/roadway) in less than five seconds. Within those five seconds, a lot can happen—someone can change lanes, a pedestrian can step out, or a cyclist could fall into the road. If someone was on their phone for those five seconds that any of the previous scenarios were occurring, someone could get seriously injured or it could cost someone their life. Since this action was believed to be harmless by so many people when it was not, laws had to come into play. West Virginia has had distracted driving laws since 2012, when technology became more of a necessity to everyone’s daily life (Admin, “West”). People believe that just because laws are in place for texting and driving that the WV Legislature/Law Enforcement could do more to prevent it, but it is hard to say that. Laws are about the extent on things that can be done because law enforcement cannot watch your every move while you are driving, but they can do something about it if you are caught in the act. There are always going to be people that don’t obey the laws whatever the case may be but having these laws have prevented many people from losing their lives. West Virginia is one of the 48 states that have laws against texting and driving, and they are one of the states that have saw a significant decrease of accidents related to texting and driving, so that shows that what they are doing is working (Johnstone, “Texting”).   Texting and driving grow more popular as technology becomes more prevalent in people’s lives. West Virginia has taken direct action when it comes to texting and driving. They have acted because you are 23% more likely to crash if you are texting and driving, says Hensley in “Distracted Driving.” The West Virginia Code §17C-14-15 states: “Prohibited use of an electronic communications device driving without handheld features; definitions; exceptions; penalties.” That code includes any use of an electronic advice while driving unless you are using the hands-free equipped in most vehicles. Having such laws may lead some to believe that people will just disregard it (as some people do), but several accidents have been prevented and thousands of lives have been saved. If this was all the information available, it would still be believable that West Virginia has done enough to prevent texting and driving, but there is still more to talk about.    Drunk or impaired driving is still a bigger problem than texting and driving, but that does not mean that the prevention of texting and driving is less important because if one life is saved, that can still be counted as a win, which is talked about in “Texting and Driving is a Dangerous Combo.” Another law that has come into play while texting and driving has increased is that the ban extended to all vehicles as long as they are running and in the flow of traffic, says the DMV Administration in “West Virginia Distracted Driving.” West Virginia felt as if banning electronic devices while driving was not enough, so they went the extra mile. The devices not included in the previous law “shall not include a radio, citizens band radio hybrid, commercial two-way radio communication device or its functional equipment, subscription-based emergency communication device, prescribed medical device, amateur or ham radio device, or in-vehicle security, navigation, communications or remote diagnostics system,” says West Virginia Legislature.    People may believe that they made the one law about texting and driving and stopped there, but that is not the case. In fact, the West Virginia Legislature just updated the law about distracted driving in January of 2022. Law Enforcement and State Officials do great jobs at getting the message across about texting and driving, even if some people may choose to do so anyway. Hopefully one day people want to understand that a message is not worth a life—not yours, not the passengers, not anyone else’s on the road. If drivers that decide to not follow the laws get caught, hopefully the motivation of the ticket price will make them think twice about doing it next time. It should not take a ticket or more to motivate people to not put other’s lives in danger, so that it why West Virginia does enough to prevent texting and driving.   As fines can range from $100 to $300 plus 3 points off our license for texting and driving, hopefully wallets stop hurting and people simply begin obeying the laws at all times, especially over a message that can wait. If people want to believe that states can do more about texting and driving, then they need to get ready for officers to start riding with them in their own personal vehicles—but let’s get real, that simply will not happen. Statistics as well as law experts all agree that West Virginia is doing all it can as a state to eliminate texting and driving. In conclusion, it will not get to a point where everyone will stop texting and driving, but let’s unplug on our drives instead of risking lives!   Arts & Humanities Writing ENGLISH 11 Share QuestionEmailCopy link Comments (0)